Voice

I read a two different story from "Fiction on the web". my first story called " I am your brother" by charlie fish. The voice of this story is like diary. Because, while i read, i can notice easily that wrote him self. Specially on this quote "I cannot belive the day I've just had, it's like dream' which make me interesting too. Although, the way he use a sentence and some dialog part makes me lough.
http://www.fictionontheweb.co.uk/brother.html

Second story called "10k" by Michael sheridan
This story is really short, less then 10 line. but the way he wrote makes me my heart is running.
Because, he wrote about his feeling while he running. what i mean is like he wrote about his feeling by each miles. so it makes reader an get a feeling of how running is hard.
http://www.fictionontheweb.co.uk/drabbles.html#Michael